tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7308460807288735887.post575815247363163762..comments2023-03-24T23:43:52.533-07:00Comments on Aspiring to Create: school/action/magic dreamThe Wyrdremhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09362292307574215496noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7308460807288735887.post-79205300808234137962011-01-19T09:56:30.030-08:002011-01-19T09:56:30.030-08:00Yeah, I haven't had practice writing recently,...Yeah, I haven't had practice writing recently, and I don't proofread. I use awkward train of though style writing, which can be fitting for dreams that are all over the place, but not for most posts. I just haven't decided where I want to draw the line between my own style of writing and what would be made by a "professional". I have to work to combine the two, and make my own writing style.<br /><br />Absolutely, I like constructive criticism. Learning from mistakes and hearing people's opinions will only lead to my writing improving, and I want to be a writer, so I have to get better somehow.<br /><br />On lucid dreaming. You may be onto something, there. Something I could make a post about. And will, right now.The Wyrdremhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09362292307574215496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7308460807288735887.post-46693665198364456982011-01-19T08:10:34.980-08:002011-01-19T08:10:34.980-08:00Yeah I know where your coming from, I think that w...Yeah I know where your coming from, I think that what you said of "epic fantasy writing style" could be the way to go especially when you're discussing dreams. This is all just my personal opinion of course, and others will see it differently, but for me personally I find the things in the parentheses slightly distracting.<br /><br />For example in this post you have the following paragraph: <br /><br />"The way I'll interpret it now<br />(probably wrong because the only valid interpretation is from the feelings I had in the dream, not my logic afterward, even though I have to employ that liberally at times in several dreams)<br />is that I did the flip, and meanwhile the weapon tangled the beast."<br /><br />You could write this like: <br />"The way I'll interpret it now is that I did the flip, and meanwhile the weapon tangled the beast. That's probably wrong because the only valid interpretation is from the feelings I had in the dream, not my logic afterward, but I have to employ that liberally at times in several dreams."<br /><br />It also helps to break up the paragraph into smaller, more manageable sentences rather than one long run-on sentence.<br /><br />Anyway, I don't know, I'm not a very good writer but just from an aesthetic point of view that seems more pleasing to me.<br /><br />Sorry if it sounds like I'm trying to tell you how to write or something, that's not my intention. Just offering some constructive criticism.<br /><br />On another note, seeing as you seem to be quite into dreams etc. have you attempted / achieved any lucid dreaming states? It is something I am quite interested in at the moment. I've started keeping a dream diary and am always on the lookout for triggers but every time I gain awareness i seem to be catapulted back awake within a few seconds. Feels bad man :(Hom Diddlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03134271724289407943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7308460807288735887.post-48638502002096901392011-01-19T06:39:57.877-08:002011-01-19T06:39:57.877-08:00As well, putting it smaller is, I guess, my way to...As well, putting it smaller is, I guess, my way to emphasize that the details are optional. I'm experimenting and looking for reactions to it.The Wyrdremhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09362292307574215496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7308460807288735887.post-7145065874795344832011-01-19T06:32:38.804-08:002011-01-19T06:32:38.804-08:00I like to include the text in parentheses as descr...I like to include the text in parentheses as description. I think I just need to tell stories better, but I do not have a great writing style of my own. Maybe I should adopt an epic fantasy writing style, with the amount of detail I put in on the side.The Wyrdremhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09362292307574215496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7308460807288735887.post-54288202485051827742011-01-19T05:14:43.778-08:002011-01-19T05:14:43.778-08:00I like your blog and followed.
On the question of...I like your blog and followed.<br /><br />On the question of how to format the text in parenthesis, i honestly feel that if the information in the parenthesis is not important enough to include at full size font then you should not include it at all. Just my opinion, but I feel that with the multiple text sizes i get distracted while reading the posts.<br /><br />Anyway keep it up bro and check out my blog if you want, its not much at the moment just some funny pictures etc. but I'll be posting more soon.<br /><br />http://humouratti.blogspot.comHom Diddlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03134271724289407943noreply@blogger.com